There are those who consider work to be the paramount aspect of life, suggesting that without career success, life loses its meaning. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that a meaningful
life
is associated with a successful Use synonyms
career
. Use synonyms
However
, despite work taking the majority of Linking Words
life
, in my opinion, a successful Use synonyms
career
and a meaningful Use synonyms
life
are not interrelated.
On the one hand, a person with a successful Use synonyms
career
usually considers his job as the top priority, Use synonyms
hence
, they will sacrifice their Linking Words
health
and Use synonyms
time
to pursue a higher promotion which leads to Use synonyms
health
issues and family relationships. Use synonyms
Firstly
, it could endanger their mental or physical Linking Words
health
. The situation of overtime and high stress hurts mental or physical Use synonyms
health
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such
as anxiety or stomachache. As Linking Words
time
goes by, it will endanger the Use synonyms
health
mentally and physically. Use synonyms
Moreover
, family relationships become less close. Giving most of their Linking Words
time
at work leads to a loss the family Use synonyms
time
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therefore
, family interaction becomes less. Linking Words
As a result
, the family relationship loses closeness.
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On the other hand
, I do not believe that a meaningful Linking Words
life
is mainly attributed to a successful Use synonyms
career
as Use synonyms
people
have Use synonyms
further
purposes that need to be fulfilled. First of all, exploring the world is a Linking Words
life
purpose. There are countless cultures and races on the planet, and through travel, Use synonyms
people
can observe the differences and accept them, which is meaningful for some Use synonyms
people
and sets it as a Use synonyms
life
purpose. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, family Linking Words
time
is meaningful to Use synonyms
life
. Family is the closest relationship for a person, Use synonyms
while
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people
ignore them as the distance is too close. Use synonyms
consequently
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people
often regret missing the company Use synonyms
due to
work. Linking Words
Therefore
, spending as much as you can with family makes Linking Words
people
’s lives meaningful.
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To sum up
, I do not believe that a successful Linking Words
career
and a meaningful Use synonyms
life
have a positive correlation, Use synonyms
however
, Linking Words
such
as exploring the world and offering a better Linking Words
life
to the family are other purposes that can make Use synonyms
people
’s lives meaningful.Use synonyms
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