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In today’s digital age, anyone with a smartphone can capture and share photographs. this accessibility to photography diminishes the value of professional photographers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays anybody with the help of
smartphones
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 can capture and
share
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photographs
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 and it can lead to unemployment because
that
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 accessibility to photography diminishes the value of professional
photographers
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. I strongly disagree with
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 statement.
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 with, it is common knowledge that nowadays the majority of Individuals own
smartphones
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 and they are able to take
photographs
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 whenever they desire,
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, that does not mean that the
quality
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 of their
photographs
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 will ever be better than the
quality
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 of
photographs
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 taken by professional
photographers
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.
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, one of my beloved friends adores taking
photographs
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. It is his passion and every time we go out he
photographs
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 what he sees food,
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nature and so on.
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, the
quality
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 of those photos can not be compared to the
quality
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 of photos taken by professional
photographers
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. We all with the help of
smartphones
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 are able to capture and
share
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photographs
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 but it does not mean that we do not need professional
photographs
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.
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, needless to say
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the
cameras
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 of
smartphones
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 and digital
cameras
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 can not be compared. There is no denying the fact that
cameras
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 of
the
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smartphones
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 are good,
however
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, the
quality
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 of
photographs
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 taken by digital
cameras
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are
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is
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 better. Professional
photographers
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 take photos with digital
cameras
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 and without question digital
cameras
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 are not affordable for anyone which means that not many people are able to purchase
it
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them
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.
This
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 means that even though, anyone with a smartphone can capture and
share
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photographs
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 the accessibility to photography does not
diminishes
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diminish
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 the value of professional
photographers
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. In conclusion, these days anyone is able to capture and
share
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photographs
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 with the help of
smartphones
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,
however
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 from my point of view
this
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 accessibility to photography does not
diminishes
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 the value of professional
photographers
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.
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  • to illustrate
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratization
  • visual culture
  • composition
  • lighting
  • technical skills
  • proliferation
  • oversaturate
  • niches
  • unique styles
  • replicated
  • high-quality
  • industries
  • underscore
  • showcase
  • collaboration
  • diverse perspectives
  • photographic landscape
  • amateur
  • professional
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