The pie chart shows how people use four modes of transport in the city of Edmonton,as well as how the table shows data from five different driving reasons.

The pie chart shows how people use four modes of transport in the city of Edmonton,as well as how the table shows data from five different driving reasons.
The chart
is describing in regards
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how
people
use
four modes of transport in the
city
of
Edmonton
, following a table that
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consist
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data
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from five different driving reasons. The chart
is illustrate
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by the shape of
pie
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a pie
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, with
coloring
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colouring
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to
differentiates
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differentiate
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the
transportations
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transportation
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. In the image,
car
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the car
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is represented by the colour red,
LRT
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the LRT
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as yellow,
bus
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the bus
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as blue, and
taxi
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the taxi
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as grey.
Moreover
, the illustration is easy to read
due to
its percentage in each mode,
as well as
the rates on the table of
people
's reason for using
car
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cars
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in the
city
.
According to
the data,
car
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cars
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ranked
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are ranked
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as the highest
transportation
that
people
use
in
Edmonton
.
Subsequently
, with the percentage of opinions why
people
use
car
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the car
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in
city
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the city
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, it can be analyzed that
car
is preferable for work hours. As stated
on
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in
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the table, 55% of
people
use
car
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the car
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to work, 45% for business, and 40% to take their children to school, meaning that
Edmonton
may not provide enough public
transportation
to reach those places.
However
, the activities of shopping and leisure period are both have the same rate, which is 15%, illustrating the usage of public
transportation
like LRT, bus, and taxi. It can be concluded that the
city
of
Edmonton
focuses their public
transportation
for
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places to hang out
such
as malls and parks.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, use, city, edmonton, car, transportation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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