The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010

The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010
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The aforementioned graph illustrates the amount of overweight Australian people classified by gender in 1980, 1990, 2000, and 2010. The data are measured in percentages and visualized in bar charts.
Overall
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, a lot of Australian men were more obese than Australian women. Not only does the former have the highest record, but their overweight
rate
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also
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surpasses the latter each year.
Whereas
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the females did not have a steep record of increasing ratio but
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a slight increase only per year. The number of overweight males fluctuated per year.
Firstly
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, the
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was around 46% in 1980. It rose narrowly to 51% in 1990 and reached its highest point in 2000 when the male population was 70% overweight.
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situation only declined by around 2% in the next period.
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, the
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for overweight ladies had a low start of 30% in 1980.
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,
this
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digit only elevated by 10% in 1990. For the
last
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two decades, the
rate
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peaked at 50%. It was still 20% lower than the men's overweight proportion.
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