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You have some time off work and are hoping to visit a close friend, Stephanie, for a few days. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter •suggest spending time together •explain why you have time to do this •propose some activities Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Stephanie,

#time #work #visit #close #friend #stephanie #•suggest #•explain #•propose #activities #addresses
Dear Stephanie, I hope
you
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to see you good in health and I am writing
this
 letter to let you know about the visit I am planning to pay to your place for a
couple
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couple of
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 days. As you know,
This
 is
a
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Christmas week and I have
few
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a few
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holidays
 from my work and I am wondering to spend these
holidays
 with you. I have some ideas to make these days
rememberable
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memorable
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.
In
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During
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 these
holidays
, Blue
mountains
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Mountains
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 management
are
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 going to organize a Christmas Eve and we are going to
spent
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spend
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 these
holidays
 in
mountains
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the mountains
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. There would be
lot
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a lot
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 of fun, we can enjoy
number
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a number
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 of activities like skating, climbing and
other event
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another event
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. I
also
 booked a hotel there where we can stay and can see the mountains view from our hotel. I am super
exicted
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excited
for
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to visit there with you and I hope you
also
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are also
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as exited
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exited
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excited
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 as I am. I am looking for
you
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your
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 response about
you
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your
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opnion
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opinion
. Take care
off
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of
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 yourself. Your
Sincerly
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Sincerely
, Jatina
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coherence cohesion
Ensure your letter has a clear logical structure by organizing ideas into separate paragraphs with clear topic sentences. Avoid mixing ideas within paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of linking words and phrases to connect ideas and sentences more naturally, and to enhance the flow of your letter.
coherence cohesion
Start with a friendly opening and finish with an appropriate closing. Adjust the format to include a warmer greeting and a more polished closing.
task achievement
Ensure you address all parts of the task equally and develop each point fully. You should spend more time explaining why you have the time off and elaborating on the proposed activities.
task achievement
The tone should remain consistent and appropriate for communicating with a friend. Maintain a friendly and personal tone throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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