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There 2 maps of Paradise Island in the past and the present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

There 2 maps of Paradise Island in the past and the present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
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The given maps illustrate the depiction of Paradise Island before and after a massive reconstruction.
It is clear that
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 a portion of the isle being kept as a research station and natural spring has turned into a supposedly an accommodation area to support tourism activities on the land. First of all, the sole dock on the archipelago that was relatively small has undergone an improvement to accommodate a bigger boat, or as the blueprint called it the "Cruise Ship". Not far from that, there is now a swimming site for people who wish to experience the beauty of the ocean.
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, for some attendings preferring a safer place to swim, a swimming pool was built really close to the hotel complex and is
subsequently
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 accompanied by an open restaurant
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 a BBQ place in the part of the estate that was once a scientific observation site and a forest. The natural spring is still located several steps from the rocks;
however
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, a cafe was constructed nearby.
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 to that, to facilitate tourists who want to exercise their bodies, the management
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 made a cycling track outlining the place,
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 the chance to look at the beautiful scenic lookout when riding their bicycle.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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