It will be better to have wide use of driverless cars for individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is a dispute around the increasing presence of vehicles driven by artificial intelligence on our roads. I cannot support
this
idea.
This
technology is still not well-developed enough to be safe in emergency situations,
in addition
, it can cause depleting demand for
drivers
and increased levels of unemployment in
this
area. Driverless cars are not a new technology since the first attempts were made in the middle of the previous century,
however
, massive usage of
such
vehicles on common roads started only a decade ago. Even though it claims to be safer than a human driver, in case of a rapid change of road situation
such
vehicle cannot react wise enough. One of the examples was a situation when a dog suddenly ran to the road and to prevent an incident car decided to overturn it from the right, but almost hit a dog owner who was following the dog,
as a result
, a person inside the car got bad injuries
due to
the rapid emergency stop.
Furthermore
, self-driving cars have a huge perspective to be used in taxi services.
This
is a convenient option for customers, but at the same time, it can make redundant a number of taxi
drivers
.
Although
, it is not a problem for young individuals to get a new job, for senior
drivers
it may lead to unemployment as they don't have other skills.
For example
, the introduction of driverless metro trains in Sydney caused a round of lay-offs for train
drivers
and was detrimental to their lifestyle, their families, and the community at large. In conclusion, some people believe that more self-driving cars can be beneficial for people and society. But I should disagree that
this
is a good idea so far, as
this
technology is not ready to be widely used on common roads and
also
may cause a crisis in the taxi driving industry.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous vehicles
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • sensors
  • human error
  • traffic congestion
  • mobility
  • displacement
  • fuel efficiency
  • carbon footprint
  • pollution control
  • ethical considerations
  • legal framework
  • data privacy
  • overreliance
  • system failures
  • connectivity
  • decision-making
  • security concerns
  • economic impact
  • maintenance
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