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Writing Samples
Band 6

You would like to join the local orchestra Write a letter of application to the orchestra. In the letter: • Introduce yourself and your instrument of choice • Explain how your credentials make you a good candidate • Express your enthusiasm for music

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to apply for your orchestra club. The club, that you have advertised in an online post recently. If you give me a chance, I will deserve your trust. I would like to work as a musician.
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 way supports me to communicate with people. I have been playing some musical instruments since I was a child. I would appreciate it if you affirm my application. I have completed my graduation from music course. I have self-confidence that I am not afraid of trying new music to play. Afterwards, I became really talented at playing the guitar.I do not see enough career growth from my former job. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Should you need any
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 information, please do not hesitate to call me. Yours faithfully Shodiyor

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task achievement
Try to provide more specific details about your musical background and achievements to strengthen your application.
coherence and cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas more clearly. Each paragraph should focus on a single aspect of your application.
task achievement
Your enthusiasm for music is evident in your letter, which is a positive aspect.
coherence and cohesion
You maintained a polite and formal tone throughout the letter, which is appropriate for the context.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • application
  • instrument
  • credentials
  • candidate
  • enthusiasm
  • music degrees
  • formal training
  • performances
  • collaborate
  • positive contribution
  • passion
  • orchestra
  • ensemble
  • genres
  • styles
  • experience
  • notable achievements
  • teamwork
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