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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

#countries #people #history #house
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A place to live might have their own historical
stories
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 which initiate
people
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 to start
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 them.
This
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along with
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 the way to explore the past
stories
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. There are some plausible reasons that
attracts
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people
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 to uncover the history
from
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 their
house
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 or building.
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its historical value. Some
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 might possess the
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 from their ancestors, which
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 them inhabit the place without knowing the background
stories
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 of the building
process
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. By knowing those
stories
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, the recent generations of the family can enhance their value, gratitude, and respect toward their current living place. Another possible reason is
,
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 its
materials
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. Technically, the inherited accommodations seem to exploit stronger and simpler
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,
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 as wooden trees or even bamboo, and is proven that the buildings remain have strong constructions until present times.
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,
people
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 will begin to ask for the construction
process
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 in order to build
strong-constructed
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house
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. There are some ways
people
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 can explore their
house
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’s history. The most prominent one is by asking the older generations. It is because
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 they are the ones who possibly
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 or even
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 the
house
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 construction
process
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,
thus
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 it is quite reasonable if
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 elder members
within
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 the family to tell
stories
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 about the
house
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. The next way is through several documents that
connected
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 with the
house
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 construction
process
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, like the mapping floor plans,
house
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 certificate, or working contract. Particularly, those files have essential information from the date of the building, the
house
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 design, the name of the workers,
until
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 the
house
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materials
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, which can increase knowledge of
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’s
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house
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.
To conclude
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, the historical values
as well as
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materials
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 to make
people
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 uncover the past
stories
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 of their
house
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 or building and in order to acknowledge that,
people
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 can start asking
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the older generations or looking
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 several important files.
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You have addressed the task with a complete response, but you could enhance the depth of your response by discussing more varied reasons behind the interest in historical buildings and by providing a broader range of solutions or methods for exploring the history.
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Include more relevant and specific examples to strengthen your arguments. Using historical anecdotes or referencing specific case studies can help to concretize your ideas and make for a more compelling essay.

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