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The graph shows the demand for energy and the energy available for fossil fuels in Freedonia from 1985 to 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph shows the demand for energy and the energy available for fossil fuels in Freedonia from 1985 to 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The line graph illustrates how much
energy
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units
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 is required and exists over the
period
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 1985 to 2005.
According to
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 the statistics, it is noticeable, that the amount of demanded
energy
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increases
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increased
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 by 2005. Regarding the presented
energy
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, the lack of
the
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units
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 is observed by the end of the
period
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. In fact, the data in the graph reveals a sharp fall from the beginning of the
period
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 to 1990 when the needed number of
the
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units
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 reaches the minimum point for the whole time. During the next 5
years
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years,
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this
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 figure remains steady.
Afterward
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, there is a slight rise in demand
of
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for
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the
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energy
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units
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 by 2000.
Subsequently
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, a marked upward trend is presented by the end of the
period
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. At
this
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 point
of
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time
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time,
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 700 billion megajoules are
neccessary
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necessary
. Looking more closely at the information about the
avaliable
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available
energy
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, we highlight a gradual increase starting from the point of 4
units
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 during the first 10 years of the
period
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. Actually, it
reaches
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 a peak in 1995.
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, in the next five years, a significant downward trend of the existing
energy
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 lasts till 2000 and leads to 2,5 billion megajoules that remains permanent by 2005.
Overall
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, the amount of the
avaliable
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available
energy
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 is significantly less than the required figure.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, units, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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