The rise of sociual media has affected personal relationships and society as a whole. Do the advantages of using social media for communication outweight the disadvantages?

The development of social networking has influenced individual
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associational
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communicate
as a whole.
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writer
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social
media
can help many individuals connect. It is
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vital
to understand that many
people
using social networking can sell something and
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people
can buy in
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a
post on Facebook or
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Instagram
.
That is
so convenient, they can text message on Messagers on Messager, Zalo,
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and Telegram
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, don not
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send
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, because nowadays social is very
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, so the internet
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everywhere and
people
just need
download
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app
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an app
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can make
relationship
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relationships
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for everyone.
Next,
on social
media
, they can share something memory,
react
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and react
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own posts,
posts
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and posts
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on Facebook and Instagram
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people
to help poverty in VietNam
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, social networking
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some disadvantages because some
people
post
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false
information on social
media
, post sensitive pictures, make social networking sites so dirty,
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, social
media
have advantages and disadvantages, many
people
can choose clear information,
they
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and they
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should
sharing
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share
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many posts
help
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poverty on Facebook and help them.

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Introduction & Conclusion
Ensure the essay has a clear introductory paragraph that states the topic and your position. Provide a concluding paragraph that summarizes the main points and restates your opinion.
Logical Structure
Use clear and logically connected paragraphs. Each paragraph should contain one main idea and be linked to the other paragraphs through cohesive devices, like linking words or phrases.
Task Response
Make sure you directly address both the advantages and disadvantages of social media with clear, comprehensive ideas, avoiding irrelevant or unclear information.
Supporting Main Points
Support your main points with specific examples or evidence. Avoid general statements that do not contribute to the argument.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolutionized
  • online communities
  • facilitated
  • sense of belonging
  • entrepreneurs
  • decreased face-to-face interactions
  • misinformation
  • echo chambers
  • excessive use
  • mental health issues
  • impermanence
  • rapid pace
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