Task 1 The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Task 1

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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The given graph depicts the number of
stores
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which were closed and opened in a country 7 years. It is interesting to note that the amount of opened
stores
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started with a large number at 8500 in 2011 but ended with gradual fluctuations which consisted of 3000 in 2018. Compared with closed
stores
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, which kept the same amount at 3000 over a given period, despite the significant drops. Moving to
further
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details, opened
stores
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hit a peak at about 7000 in 2013 but fell markedly in 2015, almost by 6000.
Furthermore
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, in 2014 results of the two trends were almost the same which
were
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nearly 6500.
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, new
stores
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and closed
stores
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remained constant between 2016 and 2017 with a slight difference in number, roughly by 1000.
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, in 2018 the gap between them was increasing.
Overall
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, closures peaked at 6500 in 2011 and hit a low of about 500 in 2015. Openings hit a high of 8500 in the first year but the lowest point in the end.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stores with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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