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The charts below show the performance of spending on roads and transport in four countries from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the performance of spending on roads and transport in four countries from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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represents
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proportions
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the proportions
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 of spending on roads and transport in different countries from 1990 to 2005.
Overall
,it is evident that the biggest
percantages
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percentage
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spending
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 on
road
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the road
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 was
at
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in
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 Portugal and Italy and the smallest
were
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at
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in
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UK
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the UK
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 and
USA
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the USA
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.
According to
 the
charts
,government spending on road and transport in
portugal
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Portugal
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 made up
approximatly
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approximately
 27% in 1990,respectively.There was a trend to decline between 1990 and 2005.In the
end
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was
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accounted for 20% in 2005,
consequently
.Italy had
different
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 trend that
shown
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showed
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 some fluctuation.The biggest percentages made up about 23 %,respectively. When it comes to
Charts
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the Charts
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 of
UK
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the UK
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,the biggest proportion
accaunted
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accounted
 for
approximatly
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approximately
 12 % in 2000,
consequently
.At the same percentages in
USA
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the USA
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 have
trend
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a trend
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 to progress which made up almost 15 % in 2005. It may be concluded from the
charts
 that there were big differences between Italy,Portugal and
UK
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,USA.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "consequently".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words charts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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