University students must pay all costs associated with their education, because it benefits mostly them individually rather than the whole society as whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.
It is argued that
students
from tertiary education
must cover all costs related with
their Change preposition
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education
,
because it contributes mostly Remove the comma
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them
personally rather than Change preposition
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society
as whole
. I completely agree with Correct article usage
a whole
this
statement because,
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students
might use their school loans for personal expenses
, and it is not guaranteed that their occupations will improve society
.
Most students
use their scholorships
or loans for their personal requirements Correct your spelling
scholarships
such
as technological devices, garment
, and food. These items might not related Fix the agreement mistake
garments
with
their Change preposition
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education
, in addition
, it is not easy to detect which expenses
are totally personal. To illustrate this
, some shopping items such
as laptops and iPads could be educational expenses
, and therefore
, these gadgets can positively affect many users' education
. However
, garment or food expenses
are not directly related with
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education
but many students
have to spend money for them in order to live. As a result
, spendings
might be personal and it is hard to detect which items are educational or not.
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students
contribute their society
with the help of their jobs, but some occupations are limited to contribute
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contributing
society
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to society
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of jobs do not have any community service opportunities. Change the determiner
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For example
, designers or make-up artists are not able to serve their nations as doctors or lawyers because their fields are not close to community services such
as health care or national security. Ultimately, it is not guaranteed that all professions will directly contribute society
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serving them.
In conclusion, I believe that university Change preposition
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students
must cover all their payments associated with their education
, because some students
use their money for their personal requirements which could be educational or completely personal, and some occupations are not appropriate to serve their nation as other professions.Submitted by historicalpen on
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