University students must pay all costs associated with their education, because it benefits mostly them individually rather than the whole society as whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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students
from tertiary
education
must cover all costs related
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their
educations
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education
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,
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because it contributes mostly
them
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personally rather than
society
as
whole
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. I completely agree with
this
statement because
,
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students
might use their school loans for personal
expenses
, and it is not guaranteed that their occupations will improve
society
. Most
students
use their
scholorships
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scholarships
or loans for their personal requirements
such
as technological devices,
garment
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, and food. These items might not related
with
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their
education
,
in addition
, it is not easy to detect which
expenses
are totally personal. To illustrate
this
, some shopping items
such
as laptops and iPads could be educational
expenses
, and
therefore
, these gadgets can positively affect many users'
education
.
However
, garment or food
expenses
are not directly related
with
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education
but many
students
have to spend money for them in order to live.
As a result
,
spendings
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might be personal and it is hard to detect which items are educational or not. It is true that some
students
contribute their
society
with the help of their jobs, but some occupations are limited to
contribute
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society
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.
These kind
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of jobs do not have any community service opportunities.
For example
, designers or make-up artists are not able to serve their nations as doctors or lawyers because their fields are not close to community services
such
as health care or national security. Ultimately, it is not guaranteed that all professions will directly contribute
society
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with
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serving them. In conclusion, I believe that university
students
must cover all their payments associated with their
education
, because some
students
use their money for their personal requirements which could be educational or completely personal, and some occupations are not appropriate to serve their nation as other professions.
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