University students must pay all costs associated with their education, because it benefits mostly them individually rather than the whole society as whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.
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education
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society
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. I completely agree with Correct article usage
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, and it is not guaranteed that their occupations will improve Use synonyms
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scholarships
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students
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society
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society
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to society
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society
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