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the maps below show the chances that occured to a town named willington in 1980, 186, and 2000.

the maps below show the chances that occured to a town named willington in 1980, 186, and 2000.
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The maps compare the improvement of Willington city in 1980, 1860, and 2000.
Overall
, the town was built with better
infrasturtur
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infrastructure
 which was more modern.
Initially
, all of the land
used
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was used
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 for
farm
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farms
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, woods, and
house
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houses
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.
However
, eighty years later, the
houses
 were added from 100
houses
 to 200
houses
.
Furthermore
, a bridge was built across the river, and a new
rood
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road
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, to the north of the
farm land
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farmland
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, was established.
a
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apply
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half of
farm
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the farm
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 and woods area
chopped
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was chopped
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 down;
moreover
, these
dissapered
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disappeared
 in 2000 converted into public facilities namely
sport
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sports
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 fields and school buildings. In 2000, the number of
houses
 rose dramatically, five
hundres
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hundred
hundreds
houses
, and
then
new
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a new
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 road was opened to reach the
publict
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public
 facilities.
Moreover
, a part of
river
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the river
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, in the south area, was reduced in order to knock down
wetland
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wetlands
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 for birds.
Shops
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Shop
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 building
constructed
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were constructed
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allong
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along
 on the river in which
was
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were
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 empty areas.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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