The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.

The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.
The table illustrates money earned by
teachers
in secondary schools in 2009 in
Australia
,
Denmark
,
Luxembourg
,
Korea
and
Japan
. Salaries were measured in US
dollar
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per year.
Overall
, secondary
teachers
in
Luxembourg
received the highest payments at both the
starting
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and after 15
years
of their employment. Meanwhile, educators in
Japan
had the least amount of starting salary annually
while
those in
Australia
ranked the lowest after 15
years
of their teaching careers.
In addition
, the time needed to reach the highest level of salary in
Luxembourg
,
Korea
and
Japan
was nearly four times
of
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that in
Australia
and
Denmark
. Among the 3 English-speaking
countries
,
Luxembourg
teachers
earned about twice as much ($80,000) as those in
Australia
and
Denmark
($34,600 and $47,000 respectively). The situation was similar for
teachers
with 15
years
of experience in these
countries
. In
Luxembourg
, the highest amount a secondary teacher could make was $139,000 in that year. It is
however
important to note that it took
teachers
30
years
to reach
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salary in
Luxembourg
,
while
in
Australia
and
Denmark
,
teachers
could achieve the same objective in less than 10
years
. In terms of
non English-speaking
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countries
,
Korea
offered higher annual pay to new secondary
teachers
($30,500) compared to that in
Japan
($28,000). As for
teachers
who have worked for 15
years
, their salaries had no significant difference between
Korea
and
Japan
($52,600 and $49,000 respectively).
Teachers
in both
countries
needed more than 30
years
to grow their salaries to the highest amount.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, australia, denmark, luxembourg, korea, japan, years, countries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual salary
  • gross income
  • net income
  • cost of living
  • purchasing power parity (PPP)
  • economic indicators
  • wage disparity
  • median wage
  • livable wage
  • compensation package
  • inflation rate
  • educational funding
  • professional development
  • currency exchange rates
  • teacher retention
  • standard of living
  • qualifications
  • experience level
  • tenure
  • collective bargaining
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