The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.

The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.
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The table illustrates money earned by
teachers
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in secondary schools in 2009 in
Australia
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,
Denmark
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,
Luxembourg
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,
Korea
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and
Japan
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. Salaries were measured in US
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per year.
Overall
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, secondary
teachers
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in
Luxembourg
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received the highest payments at both the
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and after 15
years
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of their employment. Meanwhile, educators in
Japan
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had the least amount of starting salary annually
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those in
Australia
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ranked the lowest after 15
years
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of their teaching careers.
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, the time needed to reach the highest level of salary in
Luxembourg
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,
Korea
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and
Japan
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was nearly four times
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that in
Australia
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and
Denmark
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. Among the 3 English-speaking
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,
Luxembourg
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teachers
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earned about twice as much ($80,000) as those in
Australia
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and
Denmark
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($34,600 and $47,000 respectively). The situation was similar for
teachers
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with 15
years
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of experience in these
countries
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. In
Luxembourg
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, the highest amount a secondary teacher could make was $139,000 in that year. It is
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important to note that it took
teachers
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30
years
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to reach
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salary in
Luxembourg
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,
while
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in
Australia
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and
Denmark
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,
teachers
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could achieve the same objective in less than 10
years
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. In terms of
non English-speaking
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countries
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Korea
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offered higher annual pay to new secondary
teachers
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($30,500) compared to that in
Japan
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($28,000). As for
teachers
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who have worked for 15
years
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, their salaries had no significant difference between
Korea
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and
Japan
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($52,600 and $49,000 respectively).
Teachers
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in both
countries
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needed more than 30
years
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to grow their salaries to the highest amount.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, australia, denmark, luxembourg, korea, japan, years, countries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual salary
  • gross income
  • net income
  • cost of living
  • purchasing power parity (PPP)
  • economic indicators
  • wage disparity
  • median wage
  • livable wage
  • compensation package
  • inflation rate
  • educational funding
  • professional development
  • currency exchange rates
  • teacher retention
  • standard of living
  • qualifications
  • experience level
  • tenure
  • collective bargaining
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