Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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the invention
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of computers frequently
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said as a necessary thing. I totally agree because there is a
computer
can support education and business
activities
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To begin
with, the primary reason
computer
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becoming
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important invention
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schools have used the
computer
as one of
tools
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the tools
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that is
used for supporting studying and teaching
activities
.
Teacher
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Teachers
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and
student
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students
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feel acquiring many benefits
that
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are taken from using the
computer
.
For instance
, the teacher can utilize the
computer
for providing
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the material
of
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lessons, displaying
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and presenting the lessons that are appealing.
Beside
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that, the students are able to use the
computer
for making
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easier
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it easier
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finding
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the information and data that are entailed to fulfill the material.
Hence
,
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the computer
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makes
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students
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student
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students
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becoming easier to understand the material from
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the teacher
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teacher
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, and it makes
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easy
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to obtain more knowledge.
Secondly
, another reason is making
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in supporting
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to support
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some businesses.
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The computer
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is able to minimize
distance
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the distance
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of
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between
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customers and sellers, and it can open
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a
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wide market.
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,
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sellers
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do not require going to some places to offer the products. They can utilize the
computer
for
publicating
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publication
, and they are able to bargain through the
computer
.
Besides
,
seller
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the seller
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is able to promote the product on social media
such
as Facebook, Instagram and TikTok so that these
activities
can reach the market in
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whole of
world
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.
To conclude
, I agree if someone
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that
invention
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the invention
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of
computer
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the computer
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is imperative because
this
tool is able to make every person
easy
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apply
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to perform
the
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activities
such
as supporting
the
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apply
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studying and teaching in school and
activities
of businesses.
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task achievement
Your essay presents a clear position throughout the response, however, it is important to fully address all parts of the task, making sure not to oversimplify the essay question's statement. Expand on the impact of computers beyond education and business to provide a more comprehensive response covering other possible important inventions and their significance.
coherence and cohesion
Work on varying your sentence structures to include complex forms. Use a range of cohesive devices but ensure they are used appropriately. Also, aim to organize your paragraphs more logically, with clear topic sentences and appropriate supporting details for better coherence.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • invention
  • revolutionized
  • industries
  • communication
  • connectivity
  • productivity
  • efficiency
  • advancements
  • scientific research
  • technology
  • access
  • information
  • learn
  • limitations
  • disadvantages
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