Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Presently in whole the world, many
people
and children are doing anything
like working and studying Correct pronoun usage
nothing
from
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at
their
home. Correct pronoun usage
apply
This
matter is caused by cheaper and more accessible of
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apply
technology
. Although
,
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apply
technology
makes someone
easier to perform activities, I think Correct pronoun usage
it
this
condition is going to cause
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have
negative
impact in the long run, and my reasons will be elucidated in the paragraph Add an article
a negative
on
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apply
the
below.
There is no arguing about Correct article usage
apply
technology
that makes it easy most
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for most
of
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apply
people
to do working
or Replace the word
work
learning
.
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learn
Firstly
, some people
with pleasure utilize technology
like laptop
, Fix the agreement mistake
laptops
smartphone
and Fix the agreement mistake
smartphones
computer
for performing daily activities because they feel that using the Fix the agreement mistake
computers
technology
can be economically
. Change the word
economical
For instance
, if someone has a job, and they have
to meet with their client in distinctions city, they do not require moving to some places to communicate with others, and they are able to use Wrong verb form
has
the
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apply
technology
to interact so that they do not spend their money for cost of transportation. Secondly
, several people
like using smartphone
to work or study because Fix the agreement mistake
smartphones
this
makes the time more flexible. They are able to make
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apply
the
schedule a Correct article usage
apply
such
meeting abruptly, and they do the meeting through their gadgets
.
Despite the aforementioned advantages, from my perspective, those benefits do not think
for the future. Verb problem
care
To begin
with, some people
who frequently utilize their gadgets
in daily life will often sit, and they are going to seldom move their body so
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bodies
that
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apply
this
situation will be able to induce health problems like obesity and cardiovascular because they little move. Moreover
, if youngsters learn from their home
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homes
with
using Change preposition
by
the
Change the word
their
smartphone
, I believe they will not study, and precisely they are going to play games on their Fix the agreement mistake
smartphones
gadgets
. Furthermore
, using phone
will make Add an article
the phone
a phone
child getting
lazy to study and interact with other Wrong verb form
children
people
. For example
, if children are holding their phone
, and Fix the agreement mistake
phones
then
their parents ask helping to them, they do not want assisting
their parents, and they prefer to play Change the verb form
to assist
their
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with their
gadgets
. Thus
, if people
spending many
time with Wrong verb form
spend
technology
, it will appear
many Verb problem
have
bad
impacts.
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negative
To conclude
, despite using the
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apply
technology
make
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apply
the
life becoming easy. Correct article usage
apply
However
, this
matter will cause many problems like inducing the
diseases, making someone lazy and less interaction.Correct article usage
apply
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