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The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.
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The bar chart provides data about five different industries’
percentage
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 share of
Brazil
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’s
economy
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 in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.
Overall
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,
finance
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 in both 2009 and 2019 had the highest
industry
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percentage
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 of
Brazil
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's
economy
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 and it is predicted to have the highest
industry
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percentage
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 of
Brazil
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's
economy
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 in 2029. As can be seen, In 2009
finance
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 had the highest
industry
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percentage
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 of
Brazil
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's
economy
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 with roughly 32
percent
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,
whereas
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 food processing had the lowest
percentage
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 with approximately 11
percent
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. The percentages of tourism and oil, coal and gas were the same accounting for roughly 27 per cent respectively. In 2019
Finance
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 had the highest
industry
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percentage
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 of
Brazil
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's
economy
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 with approximately 37
percent
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, meanwhile, manufacturing had the lowest
percentage
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 accounting for 17
percent
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. In 2029,
finance
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 is predicted to have the highest
industry
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percentage
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 of
Brazil
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's
economy
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 with more than 40 per cent. The
percentage
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 of tourism is predicted to be approximately 22
percent
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 which is expected to be twice as much as the
percentage
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 of food processing, which is predicted to be 11
percent
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. In 2029 manufacturing is predicted to have the lowest
percentage
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 of
Brazil
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's
economy
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 which is expected to be 5
percent
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, economy, finance, industry, brazil, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 12 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage share
  • economic growth
  • industry forecast
  • notable growth
  • decline
  • steady growth
  • trend
  • significant increase
  • economic landscape
  • industry sector
  • projected growth
  • consumer preferences
  • technological advancements
  • industrial transformation
  • mature industry
  • economic policies
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