The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010
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The pictures depict changes
of
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road
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access to a
city
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hospital in 2007 compared to in 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the access
road
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to the hospital
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a major development with the construction of some new facilities and
extension
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the extension
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of existing facilities. One feature that has not experienced change since 2007 is the Ring
Road
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surrounding the
city
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hospital.
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,
new
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the new
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roundabout was built in front of the
city
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hospital and at the cross-section of
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city
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the city
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road
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connected through Hospital
Road
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.
Furthermore
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,
in
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the east side of the hospital,
new
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a new
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public car
part
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park
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was constructed and was separated from
staff
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the staff
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park
like
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in 2007.
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bus
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the bus
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stop
in
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the west side of the hospital
road
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was removed and replaced by the bus station.
This
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station
connected
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to the new roundabout and hospital
road
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. On the east side of the hospital
road
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,
bust
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the bust
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stop was removed and became
only
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an only
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area for
staff
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the staff
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car park.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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