The chart below shows the change in three different areas of crime in Machester city centre from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the change in three different areas of crime in Machester city centre from 2003-2012.
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The line chart illustrates three different
crime
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types - burglary,
car
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theft and robbery - in the city of Machester during 2003 - 2012.
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, the number of burglaries hit a peak in 2004 and significantly declined from 2004 to 2008,
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the total data of
car
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thefts and robberies constantly fluctuated during the whole period.
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, burglary was the highest
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in 2003,
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car
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theft replaced it in 2007 and continuously became the top
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until 2013.
It is clear that
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the notable feature was the dramatic decrease in the number of burglaries, which soared to a high of around 3,750 in 2004
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and steeply plummeted to a low of a little higher than 1,000 highlighting a substantial disparity in the data. After 2008,
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the statistic had slight growth to approximately 1,500, it never increased over 1,500 and constantly fluctuated around 1500. Looking at the information in more detail, comparing the trend of burglary and robbery, the event number of
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thefts varied between 2,000 and 2,500 from 2003 to 2009,
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the data broke through 2,500 in 2010 and ended at about 2,750 in 2012. The statistics of robberies fluctuated between 500 and 1000,
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, robbery is the type of
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which continuously stayed at the lowest during the 9 years, from 2003 to 2012.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, car with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • crime rate
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decrease
  • increase
  • stable
  • significant
  • socio-economic factors
  • policing efforts
  • legislation
  • public perception
  • safety
  • correlation
  • measures
  • national statistics
  • showcase
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