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The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.

The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.
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The line graph provides data about the
population
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 change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.
Overall
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, in all years
Washington
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 had the highest
population
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,
whereas
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Columbia
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 had the lowest
population
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. As can clearly be seen,
Initially
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, the
population
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 of
Washington
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 was 75000 which had the highest
population
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, meanwhile, the
population
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 of
Yamhill
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 was 30000 and the
population
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 of
Columbia
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 was less than 30000. From 1940 to 1970 the figure of individuals in
Washington
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 rose abruptly,
whereas
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 the numbers of people in
Yamhill
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 and
Columbia
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 increased gradually. In 1970, the
population
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 of
Washington
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 was more or less 127000,
while
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 the
population
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 of
Yamhill
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 was 45000 and the
population
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 of
Columbia
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 was roughly 37000. From 1970 to 2000 the number of individuals in
Columbia
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,
Yamhill
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 and
Washington
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 rose. In 2000 the
population
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 of
Washington
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 reached its peak accounting for 247000. In 2000 the
population
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 of
Yamhill
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 was 90000 meanwhile, the
population
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 of
Columbia
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 was 75000. In 2000
Washington
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 had the highest
population
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,
whereas
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Columbia
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 had the lowest
population
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, washington, columbia, yamhill with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population change
  • significant increase/decrease
  • growth rates
  • economic opportunities
  • migration patterns
  • environmental conditions
  • rapid growth/decline
  • industrial development
  • natural disasters
  • governmental policies
  • historical data
  • economic conditions
  • environmental sustainability
  • technological advancements
  • social implications
  • economic implications
  • environmental implications
  • infrastructure demands
  • natural resources
  • community life
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