The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.

The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.
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The line graph provides data about the
population
change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.
Overall
, in all years
Washington
had the highest
population
,
whereas
Columbia
had the lowest
population
. As can clearly be seen,
Initially
, the
population
of
Washington
was 75000 which had the highest
population
, meanwhile, the
population
of
Yamhill
was 30000 and the
population
of
Columbia
was less than 30000. From 1940 to 1970 the figure of individuals in
Washington
rose abruptly,
whereas
the numbers of people in
Yamhill
and
Columbia
increased gradually. In 1970, the
population
of
Washington
was more or less 127000,
while
the
population
of
Yamhill
was 45000 and the
population
of
Columbia
was roughly 37000. From 1970 to 2000 the number of individuals in
Columbia
,
Yamhill
and
Washington
rose. In 2000 the
population
of
Washington
reached its peak accounting for 247000. In 2000 the
population
of
Yamhill
was 90000 meanwhile, the
population
of
Columbia
was 75000. In 2000
Washington
had the highest
population
,
whereas
Columbia
had the lowest
population
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, washington, columbia, yamhill with synonyms.
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  • population change
  • significant increase/decrease
  • growth rates
  • economic opportunities
  • migration patterns
  • environmental conditions
  • rapid growth/decline
  • industrial development
  • natural disasters
  • governmental policies
  • historical data
  • economic conditions
  • environmental sustainability
  • technological advancements
  • social implications
  • economic implications
  • environmental implications
  • infrastructure demands
  • natural resources
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