The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.
The two pie charts denote
incomes
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the incomes
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and outcomes
a
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of a
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charity
of
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for
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children in the USA in one year.
Overall
,
total
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the total
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of revenue sources is $53,561,580, and
total
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the total
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of expenditures is %53,224,896. There funds that are obtained by children's
charity
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charities
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are from several
sector
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sectors
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. The highest donation is donated food in the amount of 86.6%.
Community
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The community
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contributes to
give
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giving
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some grants with
total
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a total
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10.4
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of 10.4
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%.
Besides
that, there is a program
that is
performed by
children's
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bounty
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that acquires 2.2% foundations. Investment income and government grants possess the same value
that
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which
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is 0.2%, and the leftover is
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a totally
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totally
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total
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0.4
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of 0.4
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% from other income. There are three funds spent in one year. Almost all of the money
allocates
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is allocated
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for
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to
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program services with
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a totally
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totally
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total
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95.8
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of 95.8
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percentage
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per cent
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.
While
,
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apply
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other sectors do not attain one in twenty
such
as fundraising and management and general. Where, fundraising is only 2.6%, and management and general
is
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are
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also
scrimp
with
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at
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1.6
portion
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portions
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • charity
  • non-profit organization
  • funds
  • revenue
  • donations
  • grants
  • fundraising
  • expenditure
  • allocations
  • administrative costs
  • program services
  • beneficiaries
  • financial year
  • breakdown
  • percentage
  • portion
  • sector
  • philanthropy
  • budgeting
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