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The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, bit it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with internet and what solutions can you suggest?

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It is true that the internet changed
people
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's relationship with
information's
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information
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 consumption. Nowadays we can count on many sources with different
point
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points
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 of
views
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view
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 and
also
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 expose our own opinion about a topic.
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However
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 with
this
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 environment, many problems had
took
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 space in the society,
such
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 as virtual harassment, bullying, dissemination of misinformation, and
fakenews
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fake news
 production. The accessibility of the internet promotes
the
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usage for everyone, so
people
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 across the globe can share their ideas,
lifestyle
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 and thoughts. But,
besides
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 that, the exposure of someone opens a channel to
people
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commit
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 harassment and
promote
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promoting
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 bullying. These actions, even though
commited
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committed
 in a virtual space, have many consequences in real life that can
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cause
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 serious problems to
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those who
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 suffered
virtual
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a virtual
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 attack. Many news,
for instance
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, have
been
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noticed the
death
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deaths
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 of young
people
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 caused by depression
due to
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 bullying or virtual
attack
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attacks
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. To avoid it, it is necessary
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 in
promotion
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the promotion
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 of stronger community guidelines,
the
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 culture of respect, and
enhace
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enhanced
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moderation tools.
In addition
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, misinformation has been faced as a huge problem in the
contemporanity
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contemporaneity
contemporary
. The ease
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 sharing news
encreased
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increased
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 the promotion of fake news. During the pandemic,
for instance
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, there were many wrong ideas being shared about how to cure the
desease
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disease
 or promoting doubt about the
serousness
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seriousness
 of Covid-19.
As a consequence
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, many
people
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 relinquished of taking the measures for their
onw
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own
secuty
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security
 and got sick or died.
Nonetheless
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, there are some solutions that can wane the
circunstances
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circumstances
,
such
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 as
,
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promotion
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the promotion
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 of media literacy, fact-checking initiatives and searching for responsible
jornalism
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journalism
.
To conclude
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, the internet is a fantastic tool which provides
the
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access
of
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 information, but using
this
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this
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awaress
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awareness
 is indispensable to prevent bad things, like
misinformations
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misinformation
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 and harassment.

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Introduction
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Examples
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Linking
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Elaboration
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Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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