Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Nowadays, a lot of countries are becoming identical and it
caused
Verb problem
is
significantly
to Change the word
significant
world
market. Because now people can buy other country’s products in their own state. From my point of view, it is beneficial development. Because you do not even need to go to other country and waste your time to thing. The second reason is, Add an article
the world
it
will improve Correct word choice
that it
economy
of each region.
The first reason, Add an article
the economy
why
it is Add a missing verb
is why
positive
creation. Companies have their own franchise to sell their products in other countries. Correct article usage
a positive
In addition
, you can purchase things without leaving your own state. For example
, Dior Sauvage which
is Correct pronoun usage
apply
creating
in France not in Kazakhstan. It can sell Wrong verb form
created
their
products to usCorrect pronoun usage
its
,
because they got a franchise. As it is obvious, now we can just go to their shops and buy it.
The second cause, Remove the comma
apply
it
is that Correct pronoun usage
apply
economy
of republics will increase. As it is obvious, from Correct article usage
the economy
law
subject we have taxes for businesses. Correct article usage
the law
However
, it says that when you export your product you will pay taxes to both countries, yours and clients
. Correct pronoun usage
your clients
For example
, if I ordered something from Adidas, that company would pay taxes to places and increases
Correct subject-verb agreement
increase
economy
Correct article usage
the economy
to
both sides.
In conclusion, in my Change preposition
on
opinion
being similar to each country Add a comma
opinion,
it
is Correct pronoun usage
apply
amazing
development. Add an article
an amazing
Cause
it will minimise wasting time and will Correct your spelling
Because
rise
up exchequer of each region.Correct your spelling
raise
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- however
- although
- even though
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