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Some people are born to be a leadership others belive that leadership can be learned. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #leadership #belive
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Every people born with the ability that
accompany
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 them to survive in
this
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 life. So many skills could
be develop
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such
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 as interpersonal
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skill
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skills
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, negotiation
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skill
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skills
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, and important one is
leadership
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skill
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. Basically, as a
leader
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, we must realize that we have
undirectly
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an undirectly
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 responsibility to
led
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 our people
become
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a
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good
person
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people
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.
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, if there
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 person who
got
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has
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 faith as a
leader
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 it means they have a potential personality
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 suit for a
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leader
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 criteria. It's not easy
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 a
leader
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 because they have different
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, which is their
leadership
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skill
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apperance
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appearance
 from two aspects
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 as innate
aspect
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 and effort
aspect
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for
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the innate
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aspect
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,
type
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the type
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 of person who
gotten
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has
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leadership
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skill
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skills
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through
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that will be highly flexible if they are positioned as a
leader
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 in a group suddenly. The reason is they already have a strong intuition related
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 how
control
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theirself
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themselves
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 as
a
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 right
leader
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.
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, they could improve their
skill
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 without joining formal events.
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, join a
leadership
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bootcamp
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boot camp
 or training.
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, for
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the effort
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aspect
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, they
are
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must study and
learning
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 first before becoming
a
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apply
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leader
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leaders
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For instance
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, apply modelling
technique
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techniques
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for
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 imitate role models who
experts
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are experts
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 in
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leadership
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the leadership
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 field. Through that help them highly to improve a lot their
skill
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. Joining
leadership
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 training is important for
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them
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 who must put more energy than anyone
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 In short,
leadership
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skill
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 can be built
more
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better if we have
awareness
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the awareness
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 to always develop
it
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them
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 and feel not satisfied
about
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 our strengths and attainment. Don't be proud too much about
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leadership
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the leadership
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skill
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 got form inherit, but we must improve
everyday
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every day
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 and learn
a
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apply
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new things.
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coherence cohesion
Start with a clear introduction that directly addresses the topic and your stance on it. For a more coherent response, structure your essay with a clear distinction between paragraphs for each view and a separate conclusion summarizing your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Develop main points in the essay with specific examples and explanations to strengthen the argument. Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and use cohesive devices to enhance the flow between ideas.
task achievement
Ensure that you fully address all parts of the task. Provide a balanced discussion of both views and a clear opinion. Elaborate on your points sufficiently and ensure that the conclusion reinforces your argument.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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