Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters. Do you agree or disagree?
In the case of natural disasters, richer
countries
should help poorer countries
in need of humanitarian relief. This
essay agrees with this
statement because of the global responsibility to help each other and also
to prevent further
conflicts that might arise.
Nations that have the means to do so have the duty to help other countries
in need. It is part of our collective duty as humans living on this
planet to help each other. This
can also
build connections between the countries
that can further
lead to agreements that are impactful for both sides. One clear example is the help Indonesia received when the Aceh tsunami happened in 2004. That was a big disaster that caused a lot of people to lose their homes, if not their lives. Indonesia received help from multiple countries
, and this
helped Indonesia to bounce back quicker.
Another reason is to prevent further
conflicts. Natural disasters can cause displacement and diseases to spread, and this
might affect not only the country directly experiencing the disaster, but also
at a global scale. As an example, if a natural disaster struck part of an international trade route. This
would affect the economy negatively, hiking prices up because of the shortage of supply. Aside from that, this
can also
directly impact people's lives because they're unable to fulfil their needs that came from trade.
In conclusion, wealthier countries
should help other countries
in need with humanitarian help in case of natural disasters because of our shared global responsibility and to prevent further
conflicts that might happen.Submitted by acupofbrownsugar
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