The graph below gives information about household car ownership in Britain from 1990 - 2030.

The graph below gives information about household car ownership in Britain from 1990 - 2030.
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The presented line chart delineates the percentage of households in which
the
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people
owning
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cars
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between 1990 to 2030 in Britain. In general, it is conspicuous that the
number
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of households having
cars
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increased in the observed time;
however
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, there was a
dramatical
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dramatic
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decline
on
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in
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families which did not have
cars
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. Turning to the
residence
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residences
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which had
cars
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, in 1990 just above 10% of households owned two or more
cars
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.
This
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number
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remained stable in the first 15 years before
skyrocketed
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and reached a peak in the end of
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the periods
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periods
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period
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nearly 40%.
In addition
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, the
number
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of people who had one car soared
sifnificantly
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significantly
in 2005 (55%),
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it plunged
about
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for about
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20 years before recovering at just
across
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apply
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40%. As regards the rest,
in
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the beginning of the period ,there was more than 50% of
residences
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residents
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which
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who
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had no car.
In contrast
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,
this
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number
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plummeted dramatically between 1990 and 2010.
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, it remained constant for 20 years
after
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before declining and reaching a nadir point at just below 20%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household car ownership
  • percentage
  • steadily
  • decreased
  • increased
  • relatively stable
  • significantly
  • noticeable decrease
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