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The chart below shows the types of communication training taken by employees in an international company and the reasons why they took part in this training. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the types of communication training taken by employees in an international company and the reasons why they took part in this training. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie charts
illustrates
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 the training types for a
communication
course
chose
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 by staff in an international business and the reasons
of
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 undertaking the
course
. In terms of the training types, part-time training in the evening is the most favourite option which is selected by 39% of
employees
, followed by
weekends
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 part-time training where it has 22%.
Self-Tuition
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 seems to be equally popular as the weekend part-time training because 22% of the colleagues have chosen that,
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, only 5% of them undertook
distant
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 learning and 12% of them
prefers
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prefer
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 intensive
traning
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training
. As for the reason
of
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 taking
communication
 training, it's shown that almost
a
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half of the
employees
 took the training for holiday travel, which took up 46%. Whilst, only 10% of them
enhances
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 their skills for better
communication
 with clients. There are 13% of total
employees
 took
course
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the course
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 for
othe
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other
 reasons and 14% of them learn
communication
 out of personal interest.
Overall
, taking
partime
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part-time
 training either in the evening or weekend appears to be the most popular type of training, and
employees
 taking
communication
course
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courses
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 for
travaling
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travelling
purpose
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purposes
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, no matter it is holiday
traval
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travel
 or business travel.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words communication, course, employees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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