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The chart below shows numbers of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows numbers of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart compares how many grown-up individuals joined in six various sports, in a certain place, in two years 1997 and 2017.
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that Gentle walking remained the most popular sport among people in both years. It can be seen that Basketball and Cricket had the lowest
number
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participants
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of participants
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 in 1997 and 2017, relatively. looking at the details, in 1997 Gentle walking attracted more youngsters and
has
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had
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 the highest amount of participants, about 50
number
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 in
thousands
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the thousands
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, and after that Gym with about 37 numbers allocated figures to itself. As the less popular sport, Basketball appeared with just under 10
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number
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numbers
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 in
thousands
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the thousands
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.
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, in 2017 the
numbers
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number
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 of matures registered in Gentle walking peaked at approximately 550
number
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 in thousands, and in the following Hiking and Football have the most applicants, relatively.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rates
  • adult demographic
  • comparison
  • percent change
  • significant increase/decrease
  • trend analysis
  • sports popularity
  • ranking changes
  • general patterns
  • social factors
  • 20-year period
  • time span
  • major sports
  • data interpretation
  • highlight features
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