The maps below give information about a plan to redevelop an industrial site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below give information about a plan to redevelop an industrial site.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture illustrates the proposed transformation of an industrial plant.
Overall
,
this
area
is planned to change from an industrial site to a new residential space. In detail, there are going to appear the construction of housing units and various amenities replacing office spaces and a factory.
To begin
with, in the west of the industrial
area
, there only exists parking and storage, which will be removed to build a building next to a private road including three-bedroom houses
in
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the top left-hand of the industrial
area
and four-bedroom houses on the opposite side.
According to
the development plan, the East side where the factory currently appears can be made way for a parking
area
and apartment near Pie Walk. Turning to the middle of the map, there is now an empty yard, which will be renovated into communal gardens.
According to
the improvement map, crossing a private road from the gardens can meet parking garages facing Swallow Street in the South of the picture where the current offices and a canteen are located.
Finally
, the entrance and reception on the eastern side are anticipated to be three double-bedroom houses accessible through communal gardens.
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