The table shows the obesity rate in one country over a period of time.
The provided line graph illustrates the
obesity
rate in a particular country during a specific duration.
As a general trend, People aged 24-64 have to be mentioned, with the most significant percentage. At that time, the oldest individuals
’ percentage was the same as those of 45-64.
In 1971, The age group of 45-64 had a high prevalence of obesity
, with around 15.5% of individuals
being affected. Similarly
, the highest rates of obesity
were observed in individuals
aged 65-74. The prevalence of obesity
in 1999 showed a significant rise, particularly among the elderly population, with approximately 35.0% of individuals
aged 45-64 and those aged 65-74 being affected by this
health condition. In 2005, people aged 45-64 experienced another significant increase to 40.0% in obesity
. Interestingly, older adults have seen a slight decrease in over.
In contrast
, younger individuals
and those in middle age had lower rates of obesity
compared to the elderly population. In 1971, individuals
aged 30-44 had an obesity
rate of 15.0%. However
, after three decades, the prevalence of obesity
in this
age group had significantly increased to over 30.0%. In 2005, there was a slight increase again, with approximately 35% of this
population affected by obesity
. Finally
, the rate of adolescents, in 1971, with the lowest rated one, was only 8%, however
, in 1999 rank increasincrediblyble over 20%. In the last
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