The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table depicts the number of cell 2011. With these changes,
phones
sold in millions from 2006 to 2012. Generally from 2006 to 2012, Nokia
has the greatest number of selling mobile phones
. However
, in the latest year
Add a comma
year,
Samsung
defeated Nokia
by 396.5 in a year.
It can be seen from 2006 to 2008 Nokia
always led the first place
among other brands.
Then
, Motorola was the 2nd place
for selling their phones
from 2006 to 2007 and was able to reach 210 and 165, respectively. However
, from 2008 to 2011 the amount of cell phones
that Samsung
was able to sale, it is increased steadily to 330 millionChange preposition
in
Samsung
replaced Motorola as the 2nd place
for 4 years.
Lastly
, the table has turned and in 2012 Samsung
became the biggest brand that managed to sell 396.5 million of their mobile cellphones. So, it can be said that in 2012, it was the first time Nokia
became 2nd place
among these six brands.Submitted by bmaharani04 on
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