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some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society?

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Problems
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 related to the ecosystem have been of increased concern in recent times. Solution-driven awareness programs must be designed to address the issue. I partially agree with the belief that it could be solved either at the national level or only be improved at the international level. both the views
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 my opinion are discussed in forthcoming paragraphs. Global cooperation is essential to solve the issues faced by multiple nations. I believe that continually
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 the awareness campaign
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 help centres for the individuals could undoubtedly benefit the migrants.
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, the population of one country can develop a better understanding
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 the ecological
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 of the different nations.
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 interconnectivity of the nations can solve
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 of different regions by the individuals of another region.
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this
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, global identification and
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 capacity can better help the developing countries and inferior regions marked on the global map.
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 of
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 pollution treaty by
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 Health Organization - WHO at
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 headquarters was proven beneficial to
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 countries
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 as China, Vietnam and Thailand.
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 at the national level and tailoring the alternatives keeping the cultural differences in mind radiates the positive changes for the residents of the individual country. The
desinging
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design
 of solutions by the native official bodies can be beneficial to local residents in terms of applying and getting informed about the same.
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, it is easy to map out a general protocol for a specific locality by understanding and highlighting the originating hindrance in detail. Taking consideration of
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 scheme ' for vehicles by
Delhi
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 government was proven
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 adequate solution for traffic and pollution together.
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contary
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compared
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 state of Germany. Henceforth, enforcing regulations for environmental
problems
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 keeping in mind the regional aspects of the issue and tailoring the alternatives
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 is more approachable in
compariosn
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comparison
 to international ideas.
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 the crux of the topic, my opinion emphasizes designing more specificity toward the
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 as compared to a multi-level approach to the issues.
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 to that, I firmly believe certain
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 can be identified and solved by using
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 of alternatives from local and international markets.

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introduction conclusion present
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logical structure
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logical structure
Connect paragraphs and ideas smoothly using appropriate transition words and phrases to enhance cohesion.
complete response
Directly address the task's questions in your response and ensure that you provide a balanced discussion of both views with a clear personal opinion.
clear comprehensive ideas
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relevant specific examples
Use specific and relevant examples to support your arguments, ensuring they directly relate to the points being made and enhance your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ecosystems
  • interconnectivity
  • Paris Agreement
  • tailored solutions
  • enforce
  • regulations
  • consensus
  • multi-level approach
  • empower
  • international collaboration
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