The chart below gives information on the average cost of a monthly plan from four different mobile phone providers in a European country, between January and September 2012, measured in euros.

The chart below gives information on the average cost of a monthly plan from four different mobile phone providers in a European country, between January and September 2012, measured in euros.
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"The following chart presents data regarding the average monthly plan costs of four distinct mobile phone providers in a European country during the period from January to September 2012, denoted in
euros
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. Examining the line graph, we can observe some changes. The average cost of plans from Lex mobile phone
provider
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providers
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experienced only slight fluctuations with no significant changes. from January to September in January it was 13
euros
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however
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then
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it increased
till
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to
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17
euros
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.
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, the Alpha telephone provider underwent noticeable alterations ,
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initially
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it cost only 5
euros
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at the beginning of the year
,
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and improved considerably
till
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to
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25
euros
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. Now, let’s discuss the other operators. Domo demonstrated fluctuating changes,
initially
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experiencing a decline
in
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15
euros
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, followed by a slight increase, and
then
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a more significant rise
with
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of
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23
euros
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. These three companies encountered significant adjustments, with desirable outcomes,
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only Sim TX experienced a decline, indicating poorer performance with only 7
euros
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approximately .
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, it can be concluded that these companies underwent various adjustments, with three of them displaying favourable outcomes and only one provider exhibiting inferior results."
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "initially".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words euros with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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