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Writing Samples
Band 7.5

You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter: describe the item explain where and when you left it say what action you would like the company to take ​ You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir, I am composing
this
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 letter to draw your attention towards my lost laptop which I forgot to take with me
while
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 I was travelling via Go-train around 4.00 pm from Malton to Union Station Toronto yesterday. It is a gaming laptop of Acer brand in black and red colour inside the black leather bag . It was absolutely skipped from my mind to pick up the bag when I left the train. As per instructions that have been provided on the website of your railway company for lost items , I have left my written request form at the nearest head office of the company to check the train which usually goes on a daily basis within the same time-zone.
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, I have sent an email to the management including my address and contact details to deliver the lost and valuable Laptop . I am looking forward to hearing from you Yours Sincerely Saman

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task achievement
You provided a clear description of the item and mentioned where and when you lost it. However, consider adding a bit more information about the emotional value of the item to strengthen your request.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter is mostly coherent, but try to organize your ideas more clearly within paragraphs. For example, you could have a separate paragraph specifically for your request to the company.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your sentences are varied in structure to improve the flow of your writing. For example, instead of repeating 'I have', you might change some sentences to passive voice or start with different subjects.
task achievement
You maintained a polite tone throughout the letter, which is essential for this type of correspondence.
task achievement
Your letter included all the necessary details regarding the lost item, including its description, location, and time of loss.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • valuable item
  • distinctive features
  • left behind
  • compartment
  • last seen
  • retrieved
  • item description
  • identifying information
  • contact
  • lost and found
  • appropriate department
  • expeditious
  • immediate assistance
  • trace
  • recovery
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