The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the changes in fast food
consumption
by Australian teenagers between 1975 and 2000.
Overall
except for
fish
and
chips
, all fast foods increased as time
proceed
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proceeded
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until 2000. After its high peak,
Hambugers
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hamburgers
and pizza remained steady around the
year
1995.
Fish
and
chips
witnessed
short
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a short
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period of fluctuations for around 10 years until
it
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they
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plunge
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plunged
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Hambugers
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Hamburgers
have
its
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a
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massive jump from under 20
times
eaten to just around 80
times
eaten.
This
continued to steadily
increased
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increase
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until it
hits
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hit
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its highest point
with
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of
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around 100
times
in 1995 and
continue
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continued
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to
remained
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remain
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steady. Followed by pizza, increased dramatically from the
year
1975 just below the
consumption
of
hambuger
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hamburger
hamburgers
and reaching its highest number in 1975 with just above 80
times
eaten. Both relatively stable since the
year
1995.
However
, in 1975
fish
and
chips
gained
its
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apply
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popularity with the highest
consumption
of 100
times
eaten but a sudden flop in the
year
1990 and
slight
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a slight
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increased
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increase
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in 1985. Since
then
fish
and
chips
faced a slow reduction in
consumption
with just below 40
times
eaten in 2000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, fish, chips, year, times with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.

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