The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.

The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.
The bar chart and the line graph depict information about
participants
who have joined the Olympics since it started. Generally, the chart shows that male
participants
had been increasing steadily over the years.
While
in the line,
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the graph
a graph
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illustrates the significant changes in the number of
overall
participants
that had been growing over the years.
Firstly
, the line graph shows that the
statistic
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statistics
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of general
participants
who have joined the Olympics always increased from 1924 to 2012 and was able to hit more than ten
thousand
people.
Also
, it can be seen that the chart shows that male
participants
had the greatest number each year, they were able to reach nearly six
thousand
people in 2012.
Also
, the bars kept growing very steadily from 1924 to 2012.
However
, from 1924 to 1952 there were only a few female
participants
that joined the Olympics around less than one
thousand
people, but there was a noticeable rise in 2012, they were able to reach more than four
thousand
participants
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words participants, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Olympic Games
  • participants
  • historical context
  • trend
  • exponential growth
  • influence
  • world events
  • diversity
  • technological advancements
  • global
  • gender equality
  • International Olympic Committee (IOC)
  • unity
  • competition
  • athletes
  • entry
  • represent
  • delegation
  • boycotts
  • milestones
  • parity
  • inclusive
  • disciplines
  • legacy
  • sponsorship
  • admission
  • elite sportspeople
  • national pride
  • cultural exchange
  • ambassadors
  • sportsmanship
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