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The internet is a good source of information and opened up opportunities for people all over the world. Is all information reliable online?What could be done to control information online? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 the way human beings obtain information. The opportunities and benefits that a person
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 are widely better and faster than ever.
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free access to anyone in the world has
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 its initial purpose and nowadays, most of the data is fake or malicious. In
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 solutions to face it. First and foremost, the complexity of creating a website is very easy.
As a result
, anyone can use a template and upload it to the network
whereas
 neglect important things
such
 as quality of information and bibliographic references. Proof of
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 is the explosion of new domains on the network, Google had reported five million
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new websites generated
world-wide
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 in 2022. Most of them
fake
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 news and clickbait pages.
Hence
, is pretty difficult to
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 a credible repository from a scammer one.
Last
 but not least, important events for citizens can be misunderstood and
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used for bad-hearted persons. As a sample, in the context of
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 there is s lot of false information in order to stain the good intentions of a politician. In my experience, I have lived with
this
 issue in my country with the government versus the opposite.
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, it has to be a
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that
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 people can discern between true from false references.
To sum up
, the overexposure of
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 data is real and involves current contexts that could affect a society.
That is
 why I recommend
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 strategies in order to avoid these websites like fact-checking sources and always
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 primary bibliographic references.
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 can reduce significantly useless pages and
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make us
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 more aware of what we see and what we believe.
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coherence cohesion
Make sure that your introduction clearly addresses the question and gives the reader an outline of what to expect in the essay ahead. Also, work on creating stronger topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to guide the reader through your arguments more effectively.
task achievement
For task achievement, ensure that you directly address both parts of the question: discussing the reliability of online information, and suggesting specific measures for controlling it. Expand on the measure you propose by explaining how it can be implemented and by whom.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repository
  • accessibility
  • credibility
  • regulation
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • biased reporting
  • public opinion
  • fact-checking
  • curate
  • digital literacy
  • discern
  • censorship
  • free speech
  • integrity
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