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The bar charts describe how much time a teacher spent at three school levels in four different countries in 2001.

The bar charts describe how much time a teacher spent at three school levels in four different countries in 2001.
The bar chart illustrates the number of
hours
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 a teacher dedicated to three different school levels (Primary, Lower Secondary, and Upper Secondary) in Japan, Spain, Iceland and the
USA
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 in 2001.
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, the table shows that the teachers in the
USA
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 spent significantly more duration across all school levels compared to other countries.
Firstly
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, the bar graph presents an increasing trend in all countries. In Spain and Iceland, teachers allocated an almost equal amount of time on the Upper Secondary level, which is approximately 900
hours
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.
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, Japanese educators devoted slightly more time to Primary and Lower Secondary education than Icelandic tutors.
Secondly
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, the
USA
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 stands out with its high quantity of tutoring
hours
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 across all levels.
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, educators there spent over 1000
hours
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 for Lower and Upper Secondary grades, with the highest being at Upper Secondary at nearly 1200
hours
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.
To conclude
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,
while
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 there was a balanced distribution of teaching
hours
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 across different school grades in Japan, Spain and Iceland with minor variations, the
USA
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 exhibited a distinct pattern with an exceptionally higher amount of teaching time.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar charts, time allocation, primary education, lower secondary level, upper secondary level
  • teacher workload, classroom hours, non-teaching duties
  • educational system, comparative analysis, pedagogic practices
  • instructional time, professional development, teacher's responsibilities
  • discrepancies, workload distribution, teaching hours
  • statistical data, time management, educators, pedagogues
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