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Some say that cars should be banned from city centres. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#say #cars #city #centres
The many
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 people
belived
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believed
believe
 that the population said that cars need
be
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to be
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 banned from city centres. I disagree with
this
paint
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point
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 of view because
without
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, without
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car
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a car
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, it would be very
difficule
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difficult
 for people to get around. A man was late for work many times because he had no cars
of
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or
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transprotation
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transportation
. A woman who hasn`t
traveled
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travelled
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 for many years because she doesn`t have a
car
 Therefor in the life
evebody
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everybody
 really need a
car
 for yourself to convenient for moving. I disagree with
this
 opinion of view because if haven`t a
car
 many people
so
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difficule
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difficult
 in life
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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