The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics.

The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics.
The table compares the various economic and social situations of four countries from four aspects in 1994, including annual income for each citizen, the
expectation
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expectations
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of
life
,
calories
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the calories
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that each person requires on a daily basis, and
percentage
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the percentage
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of literacy in adults. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is apparent that compared to
Canada
,
Peru
and
Zaire
, Japan has relatively higher figures in terms of
other
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three indicators,despite
the
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everyone’s daily
calories
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requirement.
On the contrary
,
Zaire
is in
last
place in all aspects. When it comes to daily calorie supply per person, the statistics of
Canada
obviously
overwhelme
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overwhelmed
overwhelm
other countries’ data, reaching 3326.As for
life
expectancy at birth,
Canada
and Japan present similar data of 76 and 78 respectively.What’s more, the two developed countries reached the same rate of 99% of adult literacy. The statistics of Japan are in a dominant position from almost all perspectives, it has the highest income per person
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15760
dollars
annually, followed by
Canada
at 11100
dollars
.The calorie supply needed by each Japanese citizen in daily
life
is 2846, which is 480 lower than in
Canada
.
Zaire
ranks at the bottom of four countries from all indicators.Every resident in
Zaire
can only gain 130
dollars
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each year, which is just 30
dollars
less than in
Peru
,and they get 1749
calories
for
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every single day.
As a result
,
this
country’s popularization of education is not so high that only 34% of adults have received education and people’s expectancy
life
is just 47 years old,followed by
Peru
at 51 years old.
Peru
is basically in the middle
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comparing
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with others.Its residents’ everyday
calories
needed are 1927,and its adult literacy rate is 68%.
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