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The breakthroughs in medical science are by far the most significant advances in world scoeity over the the last two centuries. Dicuss this statement and give your opinion.

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Space
 exploration offers us the chance to learn a great deal of new things.
However
, as it costs an exorbitant amount, we need to decide the best way to allocate our
resources
. I would argue that there are more pressing
problems
 that need addressing but that there may be other ways for us to continue funding
space
 exploration. There are a number of
problems
 which are still affecting the world today. Despite incredible advancements in science and technology there are still billions of people who struggle with health, education, food and water, shelter and security. Many people suggest that we lack the
resources
 to resolve these
problems
 and
therefore
 should not waste billions of dollars on exploring
space
.
On the other hand
, there is much to be learnt from the exploration of
space
. There is the possibility of discovering new materials and energy sources. Some scientists even suggest that we may be able to colonize other planets or make contact with other life forms. Given that the universe is so vast, it does not make sense to only focus on our planet. One possibility of continuing to explore the universe
while
 improving the quality of life on
earth
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 is through greater cooperation between countries.
For example
, a global
space
 agency could be founded which allows for countries to share their
resources
.
This
 would enable countries to allocate funds more effectively and would avoid the duplication of research. In conclusion
although
 it seems immoral to spend money to explore
space
instead
 of addressing global
problems
, it would be ignorant to turn our back on
space
. One solution would be to better share our
resources
 in order to benefit mankind
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