Many companies sponsor sports as a way of advertising themselves. Some people think that it is a good thing, while other thinks that it has dis advantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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love to invest their
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sports
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to get publicity ,
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opponents say it is
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on
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money
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on other things like education . The essay will explain not only both views but
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investing
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money
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sports events is
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way to get popular in the current
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because
people
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to know about different types of things that are
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nowadays .
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byju's
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company which organizes the
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circuit
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year
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the
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large amount of
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it and
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double
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form
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using that application and make enrollment over there.
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worldwide .
Nonetheless
, on the other side , it has some negative
effect
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also
such
as when
people
promote some bad things like coca cola which is not
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good for health
people
follow
same
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thing in their daily routine .
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,
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once
can invest their
money
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on
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edcation
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education
, health care and other
thing
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things
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so that poor
people
live their
life
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smoothly and in
reture
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return
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blessings to
people
who
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gives
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things
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thing
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to
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others
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others
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other
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others
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whereas
somehow best because in
sport event
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sports events
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people
watch and leave the area with plastic raps. In conclusion ,
although
spending
money
on
sport event
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sports events
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is
best
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the best
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way to get
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a name
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and fame in thesedays ,
nevertheless
,
instead
of investing
money
on
sport
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sports
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events
onces
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one
can invest it
on
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in
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othernthings
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things
like education ,
healthcare
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and healthcare
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introduction
Ensure that the introduction clearly addresses the prompt and presents a simple preview of the main points. Avoid overly general statements and clearly state your opinion.
structure
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs, each containing one central idea. Use topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to summarize the main point.
language
Work on grammar, punctuation, and spelling to ensure that your ideas are communicated clearly. Errors can distract the reader and make the argument less convincing.
content
Provide specific, relevant examples to support your arguments. Ensure that examples are clearly connected to the main point of the paragraph.
task response
Maintain focus on the task throughout the essay. Address both sides of the argument consistently and provide a clear personal opinion in the conclusion.
conclusion
Conclude the essay by summarizing the main points discussed and restating your opinion in a clear manner.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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