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Supermarkets shoul only sell food produced within their own country. What are your opinions about it.

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Many
products
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 can be found in supermarkets, both produced locally or imported from another
country
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. Having taken other solutions into consideration, I,
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 partially agreed with the opinion that supermarkets only sell local
products
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. It is a great regulation for some countries that store only displayed
food
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 from their own
country
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. I believe
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 the idea of
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 role is to prioritize and increase local farmers' income. By doing so, the money will circulate domestically which could strengthen the value of money and farmers get
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adequate capital for cultivating another
food
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 plant.
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, another impact is,
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that if
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 a
country
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 could fulfil their own demand, the price of local
food
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 might be affordable and prevent inflation. To illustrate, if the supermarket only provides local
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,
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 the local farmers could get potentially higher income and improve their life quality.
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, despite the benefits of
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 opinion, there are several disadvantages that may occur. The quantity of a
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's supply may not balance with the demand, and the worst case is a product price will increase.
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, shipping
food
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 or
product
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products
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 from another
country
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 might help and could balance the price and fulfil citizens' needs.
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, some countries might be not able to produce several
products
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 by themselves,
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 they should import
products
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 overseas.
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,
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if European
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 countries are unable to produce nutmeg because of their geographical factors,
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 they should buy it from Indonesia. In conclusion, despite selling only domestic
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 could increase national economic performance, it
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 could impact
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the ability of a
country
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 to serve its necessity.
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, on balance, I am firmly convinced that the
country
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considers
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 regulating imported
product
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products
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 to meet customer demand.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Local economies
  • Carbon footprint
  • Agricultural sector
  • Nutritional value
  • Food sovereignty
  • Cultural traditions
  • Agricultural diversity
  • Food imports
  • Trade retaliations
  • Economic implications
  • Seasonal produce
  • Supply and demand
  • Sustainable agriculture
  • Consumer choice
  • Global trade
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