Some people think that the internet makes a person more sociable, while others think it makes a person less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is known that we can talk to our relatives or friends who live abroad or far from us,
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Internet
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. It is so important to
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communication
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. some people believe that the
internet
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makes us more social. I strongly believe that even if it is so comfortable for
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, it makes us less social. I am going to explain some reasons in each paragraph about it.
First,
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the
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is a virtual world and it gets our time so much
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it is so dancer for children. because they do not have limits and control.
On the other hand
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, it is so beneficial for adults. They
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to
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it in their work and social
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.
for example
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, one of my friends bought a mobile phone for his daughter and she passes her time
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much.
finally
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, she did
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ansocial person
while
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. The example shows us
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can make some people less social.
Second,
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aggording
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according
some research
internet
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makes an
ansocial
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antisocial
an social
unsocial
and shyne person. Because social media and the
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do not face-to-face a lot of people can lie or hide their real character.
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my cousin Alis
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is a hacker and we can say; his computer is all things for her and she lives in virtual
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. One day he said to me '' I can speak on social media to everyone.
However
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, I can not speak face to face. When I see my friends or relatives in the street, I do not know how ı can have good
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. In my opinion, virtual
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affects my
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with real
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''.
To sum up
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, the
internet
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is so important for us. We can find every information and it makes our
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comfortable. In my opinion, it will become the
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most
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important thing in the future.
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Paragraphing
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Coherence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social media
  • forums
  • chat rooms
  • interaction
  • introverted
  • belonging
  • virtual social events
  • video calls
  • messaging apps
  • long-distance relationships
  • face-to-face interactions
  • non-verbal cues
  • real-world conversations
  • superficial interactions
  • meaningful relationships
  • dependency
  • isolation
  • online presence
  • physical social events
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