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As computers are being used more and more in education, there will soon be no role for teachers in the classroom. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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technology
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 and globalization have ushered in
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 new era and
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 some certain evil. It is believed that
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 in today's era the use of computers has
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increased and
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 used
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 campuses for education.
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, the role of the tutors will decrease in the classroom. Ergo,
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 completely agree with
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 situation.
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 points regarding
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 discuss the importance of teachers. First and foremost, as by passing time with the increase
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technology
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 we can see that many classes have started to adopt the system of smart
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, live lectures and many more. Students can learn new things with a new method.
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, during the time of examination professors provide an accessible remote to the children so that they can select the correct option by pressing the appropriate button in front of the screen.
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 it can be seen that many schools have started to adopt
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 method and because of it, the
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 of staff have been decreased.
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, I think that the presence of
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educators
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make
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 a strong impact in the classroom.
As students
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 get the chance to interact with
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professional
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professionals
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 and can solve their
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queries
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 by meeting face-to-face. To quote an Instance, In Japan there are many educational centres which still prefer to hire new educators rather than implementing
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technology
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,
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 the use of
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 brings many
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benefits
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 them in the institution. At some point, it is believed that the students need actual guidance from the teachers so that they can
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 have fun
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 they learn.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital learning
  • Personalized guidance
  • Blended learning
  • Remote education
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Human interaction
  • Cultural dimension
  • Mentorship
  • Critical thinking
  • Educational technology
  • Learning outcomes
  • Role model
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