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The table below gives information about consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information about consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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The diagram below shows the amount of
sales
 of Fair-trade
coffee
 and
bananas
 in millions of
euros
 in five European nations from 1999 to 2004 .These nations are
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
show examples
,Switzerland,
Denmark
,Belgium and Sweden.
Overall
, the place
who
Correct pronoun usage
which
show examples
 sold the most
coffee
 between 1999 and 2004 was the
UK
,and the place which sold the most
bananas
 between 1999 and 2004 was
Swizterland
Correct your spelling
Switzerland
. Sweden sold the least
bananas
 &
coffee
Correct word choice
and coffee
show examples
 between 1999 and 2004. Areas with the highest amount of
coffee
 sold in 1999 are
Swizterland
Correct your spelling
Switzerland
 with 3
million
euros
 and
Denmark
 with 1.8
million
euros
.
Additionally
,
Denmark
 and the
UK
have
Wrong verb form
had
show examples
 similar amounts of
coffee
 sold in 1999 with
Denmark
 having 1.8
million
euros
 and
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
show examples
 having 1.5
million
euros
. The
sales
 of
coffee
done by
Verb problem
in
show examples
 the
UK
 rose exponentially between 1999 and 2004,from 1.5
million
euros
 in 1999 to 20
million
euros
 in 2004.
Swizterlands
Correct your spelling
Switzerland
 banana
sales
also
 drastically changed,from 15
million
euros
 in 1999 to 47
million
euros
 in 2004. All of these nations have increased
sales
 of
coffee
 in 2004,and all except for Sweden have increased
sales
 of
bananas
 in 2004.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, bananas, euros, uk, denmark, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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