The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to United Nations statistics.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graphs depict
numbers
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the numbers
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of childbirth and passing away during 50 years of
surveyed
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in Switzerland. The
data
covers the
amount
of the rates in
millions
. By and large, the quantity of
the
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apply
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birth
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births
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increasing rapidly,
while
the passing
data
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is noticeable
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noticeable
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that
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motionless.
According to
the charts, the birth numbers
are
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rose dramatically during the
periode
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period
in
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1970 to 2020, the
amount
of births peaked
was predict
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predicted
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in 2025 which
takes
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up to 3
millions baby
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million babies
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are
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born at that time.
However
, 2015 as the second most childbirth up to a hefty 2.8
millions
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million
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, decreased slightly from 2025. Meanwhile, the
passed away
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surveyed
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showing
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the
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another trend. The death
data
are
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stagnant
by
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over
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the years, the
data
has slightly different
amount
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amounts
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which counted only 1.5
millions
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million
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per year for reached the peak.
At the end
of the survey,
this
data
surprassed
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surprised
the
amount
of childbirth.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words data, amount, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • death rate
  • fluctuation
  • demographic
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • incremental
  • statistical
  • longitudinal
  • population growth
  • life expectancy
  • fertility rate
  • mortality rate
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
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