In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
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the positive fact that people have got many chances to improve the quality of their life. In my Linking Words
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in the long term, the cons would outweigh the pros. In Use synonyms
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, It is widely believed that cities have facilitated more in order to prepare a better lifestyle for their citizens. Linking Words
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, in big towns, you have access to various shopping malls, gyms, cultural centres, hospitals and so on which give you a wide range of options to choose the appropriate one for yourself. Linking Words
In addition
, you have more opportunities for your career or education which is one of the most important factors that can encourage rural people seriously to immigrate. As far as I'm concerned, the reason behind it refers to the first factor, as there are more facilities for life in metropolitan Linking Words
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, there should be more people to be employed in order to give those services.
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to find better jobs and broaden their horizons. Use synonyms
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become dead zones and their economic situations deteriorate as it goes. Use synonyms
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, my grandparents' hometown which is farmland, has faced these issues and their local careers almost have folded in the Linking Words
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As a result
, governments should put aside significant resources to develop metropolitan' transport systems, infrastructures, residential buildings and so on to make a better life for their inhabitants.
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, in the long-term, Use synonyms
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situation can be harmful and would need to be allocated lots of resources to tackle issues Linking Words
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as pollution and developing infrastructures for cities with overpopulation and in my Linking Words
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it is better to focus more on countrysides and make more jobs opportunities in those places to balance it.Use synonyms
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